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In education and employment, some people work harder than others. Why do some people work harder? Is it always a good thing to work hard?

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It has been seen and proven through different studies that some
people
 tend to try harder and expend more energy not only in academics but
also
 in professional work environments. In the section underneath,
this
 essay shall put forth ambition as the main driver as well as highlight the benefits of the discussed behaviour. Ambition is the main reason expressed by
people
 when asked about why they put extra effort into what they do, going above and beyond
than
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expected. There are several reasons that lead some individuals to work harder in order to achieve their personal
goals
, among which, looking for opportunities to reach a better and wealthy life than the one they had when growing up, can be highlighted.
For instance
, Elon Mask, the richest man in the world, has expressed in several interviews that two thousand dollars and a bag full of books
was
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 all he had when moved to the United States at the beginning of his career. Some
people
 argue that working longer hours or devoting most of the time to
study
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 could be potentially harmful and lead to mental or health disorders.
However
, human beings' lives are driven by
goals
, projects,
dreams
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and dreams
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, and working hard helps them to get closer to their
goals
, which gives their lives not only a sense of purpose and achievement but
also
 feeds their self-esteem. According to a study run by the Australian Neuroscience journal,
people
 that achieve their
goals
 are 30% happier than
people
 who do not. In conclusion, dedicating energy and passion encourage
people
 to achieve their academic
goals
, or conquer their professional challenges. In short, working hard
,
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 is key to achieving success, which
at
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 the end makes everyone healthier and happier.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Genetic predisposition
  • Work ethic
  • Upbringing
  • Cultural values
  • Ambitions
  • Motivated
  • Fear of failure
  • Competitive nature
  • Overworking
  • Burnout
  • Stress-related health issues
  • Productivity
  • Quality of life
  • Healthy balance
  • Long-term productivity
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