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Some people say that in the modern world it is very difficult for people to have a healthy lifestyle. Others, however, say that it is easy for people to be healthy and fit if they want to be. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #world #lifestyle
Nowadays, more and more
people
 don’t care about their
health
,
that
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 they have
unhealthy
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an unhealthy
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lifestyle
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lifestyles
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, like eating junk food usually, staying up too late and so on. These years,
the
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apps like ‘meituan’were developed quickly. That made
the
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most
of
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people
satisfy
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 because of
the
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their
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confident
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confidence
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.
However
, they helped
for
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the
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people
 to take junk food easier and faster. In fact, most of
people
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the people
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 around
of
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me are like
this
, but a few of them still keep
the
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health
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healthy
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 eating habits. They just take junk food several times a year. So I think that
have
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having
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 an
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unhealthy
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unhealth
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unhealthy
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 lifestyle is normal, but it could be changed if they want to be healthy and fit.
On the other hand
, I think it is not easy for
people
 to be
health
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healthy
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 and fit
although
 they want to be. They have to
do
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the
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exercise or diet every day until they feel satisfied.
For example
, about three years ago, my cousin had 80 kg but just over 170 cm. He really has
the
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 strong mind. He run along the
center
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 street every morning
,
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 and didn’t get the
carbonhydrates
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carbohydrates
 for 6 months. One year later, he had
loss
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lost
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 weight successfully – he just had 60 kg.
From my
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My
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 cousin,
that
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we can have a
health
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healthy
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 lifestyle in the modern world, which makes us more healthy and
confident
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more confident
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.
Nevertheless
, we must take much effort
to
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 it.
The anything
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which
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we want to do couldn’t be easy, we just work harder,
the
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 result would be better.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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