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some people think that the best way to improve road transport safety is to let the deiver test each year. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, traffic
accidents
 are increasing at high speed all over the world.
Therefore
, it is
a
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 most important problem that many countries face.
However
, whether all the
driver
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drivers
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need
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 to have driving
test
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tests
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 each year is a controversial issue. In my opinion, I deeply disagree
this
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 idea. With the number of
cars
 raising at high speed. More and more
accidents
was happened
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happened
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. There are three reasons
of
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this
 situation.
Firstly
, the driver’s bad skills
is
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are
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 the main reason. Due to the lack of practice
for
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in
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 driving, lots of new drivers don’t know how to drive their
cars
 safely and don’t know how to avoid
the
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accident.
For example
, when drivers notice that
other
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 car who behind
him
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them
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 and stopped suddenly, they didn’t adopt their speed or press the brake.
In addition
, the bad habit of
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the pedestrian
a pedestrian
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pedestrian
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pedestrians
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 is another reason. Lots of
people
 who walk on the street don’t worry about the
cars
are
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coming. They
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cross
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across
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cross
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 the street whenever they want without watching traffic lights. The
third
 reason is the situation of
cars
. Bad
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situation
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situations
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 will cause
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an accident
the accident
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accident
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accidents
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.
Moreover
, everyone passed the
test
 of driving before they get
the
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driver
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 licence. The
test
 of driving isn’t as same as driving in fact, especially for the mental.
For example
, when
people
taking
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 their
test
 of driving, they are concentrating on the road and the order from the examiner, but when they are driving as normal, they would feel
relax
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relaxed
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. So that they would have
accidents
 easily. The best way to prevent
accidents
 is that government should increase the power of punishment to
people
 who
affent
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affect
offend
 the law of traffic. Educating all
the
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people
 through social media is
also
 a good method. In conclusion, I disagree that
have
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having
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 a
drive
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driving
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test
 every year. It is not a good way to avoid
the
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apply
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transport
accidents
.
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