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Using social media as Facebook,Twitter is replacing face to face communication in this century. Do you think advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

In recent years, there is a growing recognition of
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 of social
media
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which
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wich
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which
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 is replacing face-to-face
communication
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 among
people
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 in today's societies.
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the disadvantages
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 and advantage
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 issue. On the one hand, it is obvious that there are benefits significant when social
media
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apps
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takes
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place
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face-to-face
communication
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. One of the major merits is that social
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apps
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 allow
people
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talk
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any
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at any
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 time,
that
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mean
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means
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 Users do
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not
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no
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 need to
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their
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 partner talking to. Take Facebook as an example, Users can use
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message
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 to talk with family, friends or colleagues.
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result
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people
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 can keep in touch
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with
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 covid-19 without leaving the house. Another positive is need to mention is that the quality
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communication
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of communication
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 is better.
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 is mainly because Users can talk with their partner through video
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, voice, or simple
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messages
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 depending situation.
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, the geographical gap is narrowed because of social
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.
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, there are some
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shortcomings
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 when using social
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apps
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 is omnipresence, the
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 and obvious demerit is that
people
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 spend less time in person,
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,
people
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 have few outdoor
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. The result of
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 is that
people
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 do not like to hang out together which
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 to
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their healthy decrease. Another negative aspect is that modern couples meet through tinder after
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 up on social
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apps
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,
it
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 means that
people
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 have memories together.
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 the population is becoming isolated and lonely. In conclusion,
people
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 speak face-to-face less than ever today, my opinion advantage
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disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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,
people
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 should try to find a balance between the time they spend on social
communication
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 and direct interaction face-to-face.

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