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Some people say companies should require all employees to wear uniforms at work. Others think it is unnecessary. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.

Every company have
different
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 protocol
in
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 wearing uniforms. For
some
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 it is a requirement to wear
complete
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uniform
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 at
work
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 while other
thinks
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 it is not important. In my own opinion, wearing
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uniform
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 makes an employee looks presentable and it is way cheaper.
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one
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 hand, some companies do not
required
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uniform
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uniforms
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 because of the nature of
work
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. They give them an opportunity to freely express their emotions and
character
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 that they want to
portrait
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.
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, models who
work
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 in a fashion show.
This
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 kind of occupation requires freedom and creativity to encourage more fashion
enthusiast
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 to buy unique clothing
piece
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pieces
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. Limited
piece
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pieces
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 of clothing
are
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bit
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 pricey in the market.
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, I still believe that
uniform
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 helps people to look more professional and safe when facing their clients. People could easily recognize the employee in
a
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certain establishments
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might help them to lessen unnecessary transactions. Wearing
same
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the same
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 clothes all the time
are
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 economical.
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,
job
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from
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sales
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the sales
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 department , consumers could immediately differentiate the staff inside the store at
same
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 time the more presentable the person
are
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 the higher the trust and respect they can get. while people working in
the
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hospitals or construction
firm
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firms
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 required proper protective gear for the safety In conclusion, despite
of
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modernization wearing
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uniform
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a uniform
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 at
work
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 is
prefer
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 by most
company
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companies
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 in terms of
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professionalism
profesionalism
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professionalism
 and
to
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properly
identify
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 its employee within the workplace. It is
more
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safer for some professions to follow the proper attire at
work
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 to prevent injury and exposure to certain chemicals.

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • promote unity
  • sense of belonging
  • eliminate dress code issues
  • professional appearance
  • enhance the company's image
  • suppress individuality
  • personal expression
  • balanced approach
  • public interaction
  • professionalism
  • personal attire
  • without public exposure
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