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Some people enjoy change and they look forward to new experiences. Others like their lives to stay the same, and they do not change their usual habits. Compare these two approaches to life. Which approach do you prefer? Explain why.

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All individuals typically have their own
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 to build their
life
 and facing problems
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 occur during their lives. Some of them look at their
life
 like a game which must be
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. The others just prefer to pass it in peace with their regular habits. In
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 my opinion will be stated after comparing these two points of view. The
people
 who look forward are not satisfied
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. They believe in fighting with problems rather than accepting them. They have enough confidence in facing difficulties constantly. Stepping forward in order to reach their immense goals is one side of their strong character. If they get over an obstacle, they will be more assertive to get close to their aims.
This
 method of looking
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the problem
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problem
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 is considerable in
life
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 of many successful known
people
 like Steve Jobs.
On the other hand
, there are some
people
 who are extremely powerful in enduring problems as they are weak to solve
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. Not only they don’t like to have new experiences but
also
 they run away if
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something new is going to change their habits. Calm
life
 far from any turbulent is what they like to go with in comparison with the
first
 type of
people
 they may not have tremendous which must come true. According to my essay, I prefer the
first
 group of
people
 as they perhaps experience hard moments in their
life
,
they
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 would be the winner
finally
.
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