Some people enjoy change and they look forward to new experiences. Others like their lives to stay the same, and they do not change their usual habits. Compare these two approaches to life. Which approach do you prefer? Explain why.

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facing problems that may occur during their lives. Some of them look at their
life
like a game which must be won. The others just prefer to spend days in peace with
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to their regular habits. In
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my opinion will be stated after comparing these two points of view. The
people
who look forward to changes are not satisfied with what they have. They believe in fighting with problems rather than accepting them. They have enough confidence in facing difficulties constantly. Stepping forward in order to reach their immense goals is one side of their strong character. Should they get over an obstacle, they will be more assertive to get closer to their aims.
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in the biographies of many successful well-known
people
like Steve Jobs.
On the other hand
, there are some
people
who are extremely powerful in enduring problems as they are not strong enough to solve them. Not only do they not relish
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having new experiences, but
also
they run away if
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something new is going to alter their routines. A calm
life
far from any turbulent is what they
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to go with in comparison with the
first
type of
people
. The latter have tremendous dreams which must come true. According to my essay, I prefer the
first
group of
people
although
they perhaps experience hard moments in their
life
, they would be the winner
finally
.
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