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1.Many people argue that eating junk food has led to an unhealthy lifestyle. This problem has become more common among young people these days. Do you agree or disagree that junk food is the cause of the issue?

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life style
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 diseases and associated problems are
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contemporary society. The major cause of
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 unhealthy lifestyle, which includes
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 management,
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uncommon health
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 and young generations are the major victim of
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 diseases due
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 enormous usage of
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food
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. Burger, Pisa and other
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 use are increasing
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 an alarming rate, especially among our young generation. The result of
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 leads to an early
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disease
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, which is clearly evident from
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recent medical reports and news.
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 adversely to your metabolic activities, which
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stomach related
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, accumulation of fat and higher BMI. The recent data published in one of the leading news articles
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 how
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 generation
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 towards
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 how it relates to lifestyle diseases with the help of facts and figures collected from different medical surveys. In order to maintain
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 healthy lifestyle, our primary focus should be to include
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 nutritious
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 diet by replacing
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junk
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 -foods.
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, adequate exercises, lowering of stress,
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 help to avoid the health
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. In conclusion, the young generation
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 to understand and practice
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lifestyle
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life style
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lifestyle
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 to uphold
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 healthy and prosperous
life
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dietary habits
  • self-control
  • advertising
  • appealing
  • convenience culture
  • fast food
  • obesity rates
  • nutritional education
  • affordability
  • psychological effects
  • well-being
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