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In most countries disabled people are not catered for adequately, e.g. buildings are often inappropriately designed. Governments rely too heavily on charities and voluntary organizations to provide assistance and funding. What further measures could be taken to assist disabled people?

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So far, in most countries, disabled
people
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 have not been given enough support by
governments
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.
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, charities and voluntary organizations are helping
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people
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instead
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 of the authorities in order to make their lives better. In
this
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 essay, I will attempt to provide possible treatments that
governments
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 could take.
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 with, the authority should set up revenue to assist
people
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 who have difficulties from a financial aspect. In fact,
people
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 are struggling to raise money for tools that make their lives smooth,
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 as a wheelchair, medical equipment, and
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other things. To illustrate, a new wheelchair costs more than five thousand dollars.
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, unfortunately, the salaries of disabled
people
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 are less than the average.
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, they need more financial support, so the
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 that are supposed to run for all citizens have to utilize several
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 of revenue for struggling
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.
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, the government should implement a law that obligates proper designs of buildings that are going to be built. The authority is the only organization that can put a law into effect. Due to buildings with inappropriate designs, their destinations are limited and they feel uncomfortable even if they visit
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 places. According to the survey that was conducted to get to know what handicapped
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 find difficult
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, more than 90
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 of
people
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 need more helpful designs for each building. To conclude,
governments
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 need to take more actions to provide assistance and funding in order to let all citizens lead more comfortable lives even if they have handicaps.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adequately cater
  • inappropriately designed
  • stricter building regulations
  • accessible
  • ramps
  • elevators
  • tactile guidance paths
  • allocated
  • disability services
  • tax incentives
  • public awareness campaigns
  • rights and capabilities
  • reduce stigma
  • promote inclusivity
  • robust policies
  • equal access
  • government body
  • overseeing
  • accessibility standards
  • assistive technologies
  • subsidizing
  • communication devices
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