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Student learn far more with their teachers than other sources (the Internet or television). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

students
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 adopt more with their
teacher
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such
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, I disagree with the
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your personal point of view and contrary as well.
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,
students
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, so they learn far more things from the
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most
students
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different social media platforms.
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, I am preparing for my
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, many
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internet
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another
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,
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different topics so they get millions of examples and valid their questions because of some questions which the
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, My best friend was preparing for business studies.he just takes the idea of the paper but he has all the information about it with
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. Contrary, a Small amount of
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also
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 agree with the
statement
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.
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, the way
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 them in that way.
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Students
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 learn far more fruitful with
teachers
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internet
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 because the
teacher
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 in class.
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, my fellow tries his level best to do studies at
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home
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 from a
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, I would like to outline more impact which
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. a
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 is a person who
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 them discipline.
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,
teachers
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 to sit in front of their parents and elderly
people
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. To illustrate, my neighbour's son who is just 8 age his
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also
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 teach him about the way he has to eat in front of relatives.
lastly
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,
students
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 adopt far more things with
teachers
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another source
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other sources
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such
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 as the
internet
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 and social media. I disagree with
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statement
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 because
students
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 spend more time on the
internet
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 and
students
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 gain all the information from the
internet
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.

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Task Response
It's important to clearly address the prompt and present a balanced argument with relevant examples. Ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic and that the ideas flow logically from one to the next.
Coherence and Cohesion
The introduction and conclusion should clearly present the writer's position and give an overview of the main points. Work on organizing the ideas within paragraphs to improve coherence.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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