Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for trourists who visit such places?

Some
people
argue that travelling in
places
like
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deserts
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or
Antarctic
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the Antarctic
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have
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lots of benefits
such
as learning to appreciate human development
also
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, getting to know our planet and nature from
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perspective.
However
, other
people
strongly believe that visits to
such
places
can be dangerous and can have lethal outcomes if
travelers
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are not well prepared and trained properly. It is certain, that getting out of
comfort
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zone and going to
places
where conditions are not
human friendly
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for living, could teach one to appreciate their current living conditions and not take human development for granted. Because
majority
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of
people
live in
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developed cities and never even think about famine, hunger, cold, heat, or being attacked by wild creatures.
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, researchers collected surveys from hundreds of travel agencies where these kinds of visits were organized. And were shocked that
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of clients mentioned that they are happy to be back to civilization and they are thankful that science and human development make
people
's lives much easier.
On the other hand
, there are lots of dangers that await
travelers
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on
this
kind of
trips
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.
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, it is a known fact that Sahara is full of wild species which could bite, poison or even attack
people
. Apart from that, there is
weather
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condition that can make the overall experience pretty
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life-endangering
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life endangering
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as well. And of course,
Antarctic's
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cold freezing climate can contribute
for
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frost bites
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and all
sort
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of sicknesses if not prepared appropriately.
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, all the expeditions and trips to
Antarctic
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always have a victim of
a
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frost bite
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which certainly is not the
best desired
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outcome from the travelling. In summary, there are numerous benefits of visiting
such
places
,
however
, we always need to keep in mind that there are hidden dangers which could endanger our lives if we are not
well trained
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and prepared for those travel activities.
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  • stunning landscapes
  • unspoiled nature
  • intrepid travelers
  • ecotourism
  • sustainable tourism
  • wildlife conservation
  • cultural heritage preservation
  • adrenaline-pumping activities
  • remote destinations
  • harsh environments
  • physical exertion
  • cultural immersion
  • pristine wilderness
  • responsible travel
  • carbon footprint
  • endangered species
  • habitat degradation
  • eco-friendly practices
  • respectful interaction
  • adventure tourism
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