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Some people think that children should be taught to be competitive in school. Others, however, say that cooperation and team working skills are more important. Discuss both sides.

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People have different perspectives on whether
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the school
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school
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schools
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 should teach
children
 to compete or work in groups as a team. Some people believe that it is better for
children
 to learn to compete, while others think that cooperation and team working skills are of immense importance.
To begin
 with,
children
 who compete against each other often do well in their studies, according to some.
In other words
, competition not only
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children
’s confidence but
also
 increase their eagerness to learn different things to
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 their counterparts.
In addition
 to it, it is rightly said by many that
world
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 is unfair and only those
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 who know how to compete and overcome their limitation,
therefore
 it makes it even more important.
For example
, a study conducted by the University of Sydney concluded that
children
 who develop competition as their core skills often do well in their later professional life.
On the other hand
,
children
 live in
society
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a society
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 where every individual to some extent
rely
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 on others
for
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 one way or another,
hence
 cooperation is critical. In conclusion, some experts think that schools should focus on competition, while others believe that cooperation and working in teams should be given more preference.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • strive
  • healthy competition
  • real-world competition
  • excessive
  • stress
  • anxiety
  • win-at-all-costs
  • detrimental
  • character development
  • empathy
  • communication skills
  • group efforts
  • individual talents
  • self-reliance
  • independence
  • balanced approach
  • competitive learning environments
  • cooperative learning environments
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