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Some teachers think that international student exchange would be beneficial for all teenage school students. Do you think its advantages will outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In the contemporary epoch, most
the
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teachers around the world believe, that it is beneficial for
students
 to participate in international student
exchange
 programs. From my point of view, I completely agree with
this
 view, and the advantages far outweigh the negative points. To commence with, there are numerous advantages to be gained from
exchange
.
Firstly
,
students
 get exposed to
a new environments
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a new environment
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 which
is
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 composed of different cultures,
also
 they are able to develop their understanding of the world around them.
Moreover
, being an
exchange
 student is an opportunity for children to learn one or more foreign languages. When youngsters study in different countries for a few months, they get exposed to various local communication methods and
this
 makes them easier to develop their language skills.
However
, in
this
 era of globalisation being multilingual or bilingual is advantageous.
In addition
, the younger generation gets familiar with new technological concepts which
broadens
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 their knowledge in the field of information technology. Children who are having experience of travelling in various countries have more communication skills as well as their personality is well developed.
On the other hand
, there the minor negative facts as well.
To begin
 with, international programs are very expensive for
students
.
Therefore
 every child can’t afford university or school payments, and some children are born to poor families and some are middle class and rich. Another considerable fact is, most of the
students
 get homesick and depressed which leads them to fail their grades. To sum up, even though there are minor drawbacks
of
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students'
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exchange
 in the world, these disadvantages cannot overcome the positive facts.
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