IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 4

ın the future, nobody wiil buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying

#ın #future #nobody #wiil #newspapers #books
Correct your spelling
today's
todays
Correct your spelling
Today
 technologies enable us to read
Add an article
a book
the book
show examples
book
Fix the agreement mistake
books
show examples
 on electronic devices and
Correct your spelling
what's
show examples
whats
Correct your spelling
what's
show examples
 more, we can store hundreds of thousands of
books
 on devices like Amazon's kindle e-reader.
This
 makes some
people
to
Change the verb form
apply
show examples
believe that
people
 will stop printing
books
 and in the future, everything will be digitalized. Electronic
books
 and
newspapers
 have many advantages. They are easy to use and
Correct your spelling
reach
rich
rech
Correct your spelling
reach
. They can be stored in computers, mobiles, e-readers and in
cloud
Add an article
the cloud
show examples
 in huge amounts and are available at any time. The cost of manufacturing and printing is completely removed, which reduced their price. Digital
book
Fix the agreement mistake
books
show examples
 and
newspapers
also
 have one very important advantage - they are environmentally friendly. No paper is used to print
magazines
 and
books
, which means
less
Change the quantifier
fewer
show examples
 trees are cut from our forests to produce
papers
Fix the agreement mistake
paper
show examples
. All of these factors convinced many
people
 that digital versions of
books
 and
magazines
is
Change the verb form
are
show examples
 more convenient, ethical and cheaper choice.
On the other hand
, traditional printed
books
 and
magazines
 have existed for centuries and I believe they have created some kind of emotional connection and
value
 for
people
. When a man reads a book and he likes it, he most probably would like to have it in a form of a tangible thing.
Books
 are a form of art, like statues and paintings. You can have a picture of some famous painting, but the painting itself has some intangible
value
.
Magazines
 and
newspapers
 do not have
such
a
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
value
 in themselves. Based on
this
, I believe that the
amount
Change the quantifier
number
show examples
 of
books
are
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
printed will decrease considerably and maybe even dramatically,
however
Add the comma(s)
,however
show examples
 printed, tangible
books
 will still be demanded by many
people
 as they have some aura and
value
in addition
 to the things that are written inside. I do think, though, that there is
a
Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
show examples
big chance
magazines
 and
newspapers
 will move into the online world completely.
This
 is because they are published in huge numbers daily and weekly and monthly and no one needs them after years. Printing so
huge
Correct article usage
a huge
show examples
 amount of articles will demand additional
Correct your spelling
resources
recources
Correct your spelling
resources
 and make them less competitive even in terms of price.
Submitted by bengisuzeynep7510 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: