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Topic: There is a disagreement on the impact of increased business and culture contact between countries on a country's identity. What's your opinion?

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Cross-cultural conjunction has been emerging as an exceedingly conspicuous matter in today’s society in which travels for commerce and knowledge become more prevalent than ever.
A daunting
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 angst
that is
 rising among nations is the decay of their national identities
as a result
 of business and
culture
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 interaction.
This
 issue should be viewed and analyzed from multiple perspectives.
Initially
, the demise of national identity is an irrevocable menace to every state who warmly welcomes growing economic exchange. In truth, cooperation is the core of economic practices, connecting cooperates, groups and companies with one another worldwide.
Nevertheless
, any type of association is regularly grounded on the narrowed distance in
culture
 among people of different nationalities in that profound cultural distinctions are liable to result in
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 isolation or even prejudice.
For example
, to make a successful transaction with Japanese entrepreneurs, it is advisable to conform to their traditional customs because in their eyes any cultural misunderstanding or violation is an intolerable disgrace.
Conversely
, the prosperity of
culture
-based industries is erected on the platform of ethnic variation which functions as the primary weapon to draw international visitors. Supposing there were no differentiating features amid nations in view of
culture
.
Then
, the universal curiosity about different cultures would gradually dissipate, which leads to
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 in travelling and no conjunction at all. As
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proof, people are prone to visit exotic places which seem peculiar to them, rather than familiar ones sharing one or some features with their indigenous
culture
. As outlined above, stimulated economic and cultural interactions are intrinsically attributed to corroded national identity which,
otherwise
, substantially benefits tourism and related industries.
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