At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

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in some

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serious human resource challenges in the future. They will fill all of their job positions with their residents, and they will not have to import experts from foreign

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in some governmental jobs like

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, there are several disadvantages, which cause by

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need many places which provide entertainment for them. Every single of these facilities

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amount of budget.

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, by the time they need various kinds of job opportunities, and it will be competitive between them,

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will be not easy for

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of facilities, that government should supply them. In conclusion, I believe that

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has several positive points, which improve the different sides of the country,

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I believe that its disadvantages outweigh the advantages.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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