Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Some different
languages
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world annually. A group of people believe that we shouldn't care about
this
subject, since we will be more comfortable in our life with
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languages
in the world. There are several reasons why I would argue against
this
opinion.
First
of all, every
language
has a cultural background. With losing a
language
, there is no way to understand and use that culture.
For example
: a primitive group of people live in a small area in Africa. They don't have any
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to
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other countries or foreign people. If their
language
dies out by their death, there is no way to understand
about
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their traditions, their ethnic beliefs or even their everyday life.
Secondly
, every
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have
their
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own information
system
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like letters or books. By missing their
language
, we don't have any way to recognize
that
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who were they, how
was
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the
economy
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system worked or how
was
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the conditions of their social life. Some other negative
consequences
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of
this
opinion
is
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that integration is not the proper happening in some issues. Dead ending for some
languages
is a threat to other
languages
. A
word
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with few
languages
,
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is not
easy
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world to live
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is a totalitarian ward
that is
like South Korea!
On the other hand
, no one forced
the
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others to learn that specific
language
, so
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life” cannot be
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reason for forgetting the importance of existing and using various
languages
. There is a free word, which everyone should use and protect their own
language
. In conclusion, I would argue that we lose many important things by losing some
languages
, like freedom and lots of information and we shouldn’t destroy the bridge to
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another worlds
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic diversity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Language extinction
  • Communication barrier
  • Linguistic imperialism
  • Endangered languages
  • Language revitalization
  • Monolingual
  • Multilingual
  • Language preservation
  • Homogenization
  • Language policy
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Intangible heritage
  • Indigenous languages
  • Globalization
  • Dialects
  • Localization
  • Language documentation
  • Digital archiving
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