Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Today we can see many signs of globalization in different aspect of
societies
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;
product’s
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product
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similarities in
selling
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the selling
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system
in various
countries
is one of the effects of
this
phenomenon, which gives an opportunity to
people
around the
world
to buy
same
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goods. I will argue that
although
this
similarity has some negative effects, it can
has
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important positive consequences.
First
of all,
this
development
reduce
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discrimination in
third
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third-world
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world
countries
around the
world
. The selling
system
in developing
countries
is weak and their national
products
have low quality; by inter international goods in their selling
system
,
people
can buy
high quality
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products
.
Secondly
, through
this
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accessible universal
products
, national companies get into
a
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competition, which
force
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them to improve their standards.
Finally
,
this
similarity cause closeness
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the citizens of the global village;
residences
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can share their experiences
to
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others, and they feel they are similar to each other.
On the other hand
,
this
phenomenon has some negative consequences on
national
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the national
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economy of small
countries
.
For instance
, many
people
produce special
kind
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kinds
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of
products
, which produce in small studios; through
this
development,
people
don’t buy their goods anymore, because they are not enough good in
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to foreign
products
. Inflation is another negative effect of globalization
in
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on
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selling
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the selling
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system
:
products
of
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from
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abroad
countries
are expensive in developing
countries
and Importing
of
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these
products
increase
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the inflation rate. Culture is another important factor that may
affected
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by
this
selling
system
;
for example
, during
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the
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time,
new
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generation
forget
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about their traditional clothes and replace
T-shirt
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T-shirts
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and jeans
instead
of them. In conclusion,
although
globalization in selling
system
and similarity in
products
around the
world
has some negative aspects, I believe that positive points overcome its drawbacks
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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