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In many countries fast food becomes part of life. It affects people’s lifestyle and diet as well. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your opinion and relevant examples.

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The past half-century saw the rise of the fast
food
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 industry.
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 has now become a major part of the lives of many
people
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. While fast
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 is easy to find and cheap, it affects
people
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's lifestyles and diets in a negative way. I fully agree with the statement.
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, fast
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 has been growing in popularity in developed nations,
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 as the USA, Australia and most of Europe. Brands like Mcdonald,s and Burger Bing,
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, have become the
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 places
people
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 order from.
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 is due to the fact that they are in very convenient locations, have fast delivery, and are usually cheaper than healthy alternatives.
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, cooking has decreased in popularity, due to the fact it's very time-consuming and difficult.
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, ingredients have become more expensive due to the current economical climate. Fast
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 has been proven to be detrimental to lifestyle and health. Studies have shown that fast
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 is one of the leading causes of; obesity, coronary artery disease, and hypertension, among others.
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 can be seen in the large increase in the incidence of said diseases in the developed world.
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,
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food
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 contains large amounts of salt, oil and carbohydrates.
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,
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 cooked outside is more likely to contain preservatives and other carcinogenic chemicals. These increase the likelihood of cancer.
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, vitamins and other essential minerals are usually minimal in takeaway
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 and
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 predisposing to many deficiencies and diseases. In conclusion, fast
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 has become a crucial part of life for many
people
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, especially in the developed world.
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 has caused a negative effect on the diet, lifestyle, and health of
people
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. For these reasons, I think the statement is true, and
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 can be seen in the increased occurrence of diseases in countries where fast
food
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 is common.
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