Some think increasing business and cultural contact between nations is positive. Others think it leads to the disappearance of the national identity. Discuss both views and state your own opinion.

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Some
people
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believe that the development of business and cultural cooperation between different countries leads to positive effects.
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, others think that it affects
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of the national identity. In my opinion,
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globalization only benefits all societies across the world, so it only improves strong parts of culture. On the one hand, when enterprises collaborate with partners in different countries, they exchange valuable information and discover new ways to produce goods cheaper and in the best condition.
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, a lot of businesses outsource production to Chinese factories because it empowers entrepreneurs to sell products cheaper in many emerging countries. The other benefit is
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ability to exchange cultural aspects
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cuisine. Even a medium-sized town provides a variety of restaurants with dishes that without globalization we would experience only being in a country by ourselves.
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, cultural uniqueness could seriously suffer from international
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.
People
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tend to adopt traditions and rituals from other nations which they usually like.
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, if
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had
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more about
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the country's
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identity, we would have not adopted junk food
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McDonalds
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McDonald's
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which replaced traditional dishes. Junk food was popularized in the US
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and
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became highly available in the global market with
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popularity of
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American culture. In conclusion, I would like to emphasize that cultural exchange is an essential part of modern life as well as international cooperation in business. I truly believe that it helps
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to live in a better environment, but it has some tradeoffs.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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  • moreover
  • also
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