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Some people think that because of email and telephone, communication among people is less personal now than it used to be. Do you agree or disagree with this view?

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In today's world of sophisticated technology, humans are more likely to communicate with each other easier than before. Obviously, the invention of high-tech devices
such
 as
telephone
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 and computers helps
people
 keep in touch comfortably.
However
, according to some,
this
 way of communication is not
personally
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 enough
than
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 its peers
like
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as
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 face-to-face interactions. In the following, I will explain the reasons why I generally disagree with
this
 point of view.
Firstly
, being acquainted with
email
, as one of the most popular communicating
context
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, provides societies with an opportunity to stay connected more than before.
For example
, university students are able to share their projects and articles by means of
email
 and
this
 is considered not only a comfortable but
also
time-saving
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the time-saving
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 route for them.
In addition
, using telephones would make remote interactions simple. For
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instance
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,
people
 can talk to their friends and relatives in
distant
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a distant
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country
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 without the hardship of writing letters which used to.
Thus
, it may be evident for many like me that the pros of utilizing
email
 and telephone outweigh their cons.
On the other hand
, some claim about the problems of these communicating tools in terms of personality.
Nevertheless
, I suppose that
via
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 applying passwords for emails and avoiding
to share
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it
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them
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 with others as well as using
portable
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the portable
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phone
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phones
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instead
 of
unportable
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an unportable
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one
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ones
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, which
bring
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people
 a private space to talk,
this
 problem can be tackled practically. In conclusion of what aforementioned, in spite of the advantages which they bring to
community
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the community
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, some
people
 believe that they are not personal enough. As said earlier, at the same time individuals earn a profit from these contexts,
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setting
seting
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 a password for
email
 and making a call in someone's privacy are considered as a solution to the problem of being not personal enough.
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