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Technolgy today such as mobile phones are destroying social interactions. Do you agree or disagree?

#technolgy #phones #interactions
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Some
people
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 say that improving technology
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 as mobile phones, apps etc affects social communication in a destructive way. I do not agree with that because I think it changes social interactions. Emerging new technologies
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 as the Internet, mobile phones, new platforms created for communicating applications
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 as WhatsApp, Telegram, Instagram and etc. These platforms change the way how
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 interact. It may reduce physical communications but today
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 contact more digitally. For ,example They post on Instagram and followers comment on them. Nowadays
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 share their ideas, and experiences on social media with their friends and family. And communicate through calls, comments, and likes. New technologies helped
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 to find new ones who are more similar to them around the world more easily. For ,example new platforms
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 as Discord or Slack were created so
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 with the same goal or speciality can communicate and make friends or teams and work on it. So I believe that new technologies are not destroying social interactions but it transforms them.
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