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Some parents buy their children a large number of toys to play with. What are the advantages and disadvantages for the child of having a large number of toys?

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In the contemporary world, most
parents
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 spend lavishly on
toys
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 for their
children
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.
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 trend has advantages as well as disadvantages in the long run, in respect of
kids
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 development.
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 discuss the pros and cons by stating relevant examples.
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, most
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 love to bestow gifts to their
children
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 more often, even though, they have enough
toys
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 to play with.
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 is due to the unconditional love of their
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 showering kids with
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 would have a detrimental impact on their cognitive development of a child.
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 as more
toys
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 distract the ability of the focus and determination of the little one, in other ,words they receive new
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 before they lose interest in the existing
toys
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. As per the research done by the University of Wales 70% of
children
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 tend to become hyperactive kids due to the excessive number of unnecessary
toys
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 they have.
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, to ,start with the advantages of having a lot of
toys
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 would certainly be beneficial to divert
children
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 from screens to practical activities which is helpful for them to develop their gross-motor skills.
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 as building boxes, puzzles and handwork help to develop the thinking ability and hand movements of
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 cohort. as an example, nowadays, doctors encourage
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 to send their
children
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 to play school from an early stage
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 providing mobile phones in their hands.
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, spending time with
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 gradually improves a child's brain and behaviour. To conclude, even though some oppose giving
toys
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 to
children
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, it has myriad of benefits which are rather helpful to develop a child's abilities.
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, I believe that
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 can be given in a controlled environment where it would not limit his/her abilities.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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