In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problem as a result of eating to much fast food. It is neccesary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Nowadays,
people
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do not have much time to cook for themselves
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they have to rely on readymade
foods
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which
is
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are
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undoubtedly poisonous
for
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to
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peoples
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people's
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health
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and wellbeing
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wellbeing
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well-being
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. There are several acute and chronic disease
people
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are suffering from due to
this
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kind of
food
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habits and
government
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the government
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has to spend
majority
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the majority
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of
their
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its
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budget to combat these issues.
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, in my opinion,
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policymakers
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policy makers
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policymakers
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should take strict actions like increasing tax on
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junk
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jank
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junk
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foods
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to reduce
habit
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the habit
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of eating fast
foods
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among
general
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the general
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public.
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with, usually, ready-made
foods
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are
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consist of unhealthy substances which can affect consumers'
health
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either
with in
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within
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a short term or
long
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term. Manufacturers who are selling these products are more into their profit, they do
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not
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no
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not
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even think
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about
abouts
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about
its pitfall. Due to
this
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reason, thousands of
individual
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individuals
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getting affected by various
disease
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diseases
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and
illness
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illnesses
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such
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as
food
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poisoning, diabetes
malitus
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Mellitus
,
heart
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and heart
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disease.
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, most individuals in
recent
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era are leading
sedentary
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a sedentary
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lifestyle
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lifestyles
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, they do
no
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not
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work out much, on top of that
instead
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of clarifying
food
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quality, they are consuming these items due to its
mouth watering
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test
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they are having some substances which can be dangerous for their general
health
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in long term.
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, to improve
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the test
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test
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testing
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of the
food
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, some multinational
food
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chain
company
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companies
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used a spice called aginamotor which can
causes
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cause
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cancer and neuro
problem
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problems
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.
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, due to tremendous workload,
people
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in recent days left with very little spare time, and at the same time,
coorupted
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corrupted
corrupt
businesses are taking
its
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apply
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advantages
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advantage
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and selling
low quality
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low-quality
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food
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items
in
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at
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high prices.
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, consuming
low quality
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low-quality
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foods
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are
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is
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not only
detoriating
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deteriorating
public
health
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in general but
also
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increasing
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increases
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burden
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the burden
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on
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health
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the health
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care system of
country
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the country
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which directly
effecting
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affecting
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nation's
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the nation's
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economy. To conclude,
although
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provision
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the provision
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of
ready to eat
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ready-to-eat
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food
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has made individuals' life easy,
but
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in
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the longterm
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long term
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longterm
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long term
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it has more demerits than merits. So,
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government
governments
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the governmnet
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governmnet
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government
had better take actions like
food
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audit
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audits
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,
increase
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and increase
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taxation to reduce junk
food
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intake among common
people
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.
Besides
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these,
government
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the government
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can organize
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awareness
awarness
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awareness
programme
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programmes
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related to
healthy
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a healthy
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diet
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diets
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and
food
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safety.
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