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Manufacturing process of making sugar from sugar scane

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The diagram shows 7 steps of how
sugar
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 is made from
sugar
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cane
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. Overall, It starts with growing the
sugar
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cane
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 and after processing through different stages they separate
sugar
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 from
syrup
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 and dry the
sugar
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 for the use of consumers. Looking into the details, the
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 step in making
sugar
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 is growing
sugar
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cane
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 which will take around 12 to 18 months. Once a crop is ready
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 it will be harvested by using 2 different methods.
sugar
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cane
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 can be harvested with the help of machines or by using manual labour. The
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 step in
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 process is crushing,
sugar
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cane
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 will be crushed and juice is extracted.
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,
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 juice will be purified by using a limestone filter so that all impurities can be removed from it. Once the juice is ready
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 it will be heated in the evaporator to turn it into
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. After that
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syrup
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 will be passed into the centrifuges where
sugar
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 separated from the
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 and turned into crystals. At the final stage,
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 crystalised
sugar
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 is left for drying and cooling for the usage of customers.

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