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Band 6

Xada. The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Overall
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,the two maps illustrate the changes that took place in Porth
Harbour
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 between the year 2000 and today. the
harbour
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area
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 has been modernised and developed for tourism.
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 the main structure of the
harbour
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 has remained the same, some old buildings were removed, and several new facilities were added. In 2000, the eastern side of the
harbour
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 had a dock with passenger ferries, and there was a disused castle
further
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 along the coast. Today,
this
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 castle has been replaced with a large hotel, and a private road leading to the hotel has been built. The passenger ferry dock still exists, but now there are more ferries shown in the
harbour
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. On the western side, the showers and car park, marina for private yachts, and fishing boats have stayed in the same location.
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, a new row of cafés and shops has been built between the road and the lifeboat station, adding a commercial
area
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 for visitors. The public beach and the dock
also
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 remain unchanged, but the
overall
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area
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 looks more welcoming to tourists and visitors now. The changes suggest that the
harbour
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 has shifted from a mostly functional
area
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 to a more tourist-friendly location with hotels, cafés, and better access.

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Expand on some points for a more detailed comparison between the past and present harbour.
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Use more linking words to create a smoother transition between points and paragraphs.
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You provided a clear overview of the changes and highlighted significant differences between the years 2000 and today.
coherence and cohesion
The logical structure of your essay is strong, with clear paragraphs that address different aspects of the harbour's development.

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