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Fast food industry is having negative effects on our health? Do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
 modern era, along with technical advancements,
food
 consumption is
also
 getting advanced as it
also
 has affected our health and I completely agree with
this
 statement
therefore
 I will provide reasons to justify my answer in the following paragraphs
To begin
 with,fast
food
 has deleterious effects on health as it originated many health-related problems in an individual
such
 as from the
last
 decade it is seen that more cases of obesity
,
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 and heart diseases are come across by consuming street
food
.Along with
this
,various ingredients are used by the
food
 makers which affect the economy of a nation
also
,to illustrate
this
, government spend a lot of budgets just to import artificial flavours from abroad which interrupts their incentives too.
Besides
, fast
food
 suppliers
also
 enhance the use and throw culture in a country,
for example
,more people usually taste the
food
 and the rest of it is disposed of which is seen in various places creating pollution. It
also
 affects the expense of a person,
for instance
,due to a hectic schedule, most people buy their meals from restaurants which seems to be much costlier than homemade
food
 and waste a valuable amount of their income on fast
food
. In conclusion, one should consume
food
 from the
food
 industry but at small intervals so that it does not have a major impact on an individual's body as it causes different kinds of ailments in human beings.
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