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People work because they need money to live. What are some other reasons that people work? Discuss one or more of these reasons. Use specific examples and details to support your answer.

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In human history, work has always played a fundamental role. After the
first
 industrial revolution in England in the XVIII century,
people
 started to spend most of their time working. Someone argue that
people
 go to their job because they need money to live. Obviously, I agree with
this
 statement, but I think that there are other reasons behind
this
. In
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 I will explain them with specific examples.
Firstly
, a considerable number of individuals go to their workplaces because they love to do it. In order to understand
this
 concept we need to analyse
people
's stories. Usually, they grew up with the dream of becoming a professional football player, a soldier or a teacher, and when they realize it, they start to be very passionate about their profession. The most concrete example is the famous quote that says "Find a job that you love, and you will never work one day".
This
 is my favourite vision of the job.
Secondly
, there is another motivation that can move human beings to pursue their career, and it is fear.
This
 is not as inspirational as the previous one
,
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 but is largely common in our society. Nowadays a lot of individuals choose a craft that they don't really like and
this
 happens because they do not want to disappoint their family, especially their
parents
. It is common that
parents
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 too much pressure on the shoulders of their sons, by choosing
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their college and career. In order to make their
parents
 proud of them, youngsters forget about their real passions. An example is famous
people
's sons, that follow the path of their successful
parents
 because they want to make them proud, but most of the time
that is
 not the right path for them and they become sad and depressed. To conclude, despite the main reason why
people
 work is that they need money to live, there are
also
 other motivations
such
 as they follow their passion or their dream and
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because
becuase
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because
 they do not want to disappoint their
parents
.
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