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Now , many people think that there is no justification for attending lectures. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #justification #lectures
Presently,
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lectures
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painless. Even though it could be boring for several students it may be a big plus during their studies .
Hence
 , they all should pay
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attention
for
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 that. On the right hand , there is
minus
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 from that . Many students even sleep during the
lectures
 because
it
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 cannot draw attention to
itself
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 and continues at the same pace , taking two occasionally three hours .
For instance
 , my brother
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studies
study
studys
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studies
 at the university and he always says that when there are
lectures
, some of his friends sleep listening to music with headphones.
Consequently
, when
are
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 exams, all questions ,
tests
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 might be taken from
lectures
 .
Thus
 , they get a low score . It
is
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occurred because of
brodem
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broad
.
On the other hand
 , it is a benefit for students
study
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 . Some
lectures
 are interesting.
Also
 ,
there
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learners
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 who discuss a variety of
the
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theorems. Take
for example
 these learners who do
this
 . They can exchange
with
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their
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 knowledge
which
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they learned during
lectures
 or their opinions about the topics and they take
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only the necessary data to write
to
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 notebooks .
As a result
, all
these
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 information
remain
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in their brains .
Therefore
, they might be straightforward on the exams. In conclusion, I think that though
lectures
 could
boring
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 they include more
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positive sides
 than
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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