Today many children spend a lot of time playing computer games and little time on sports. Why is this? Is it a positive or negative development?

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Advancement in technology has made people lazy. The gaming industry is one of the
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of their
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games
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essay discusses the advantages and disadvantages of computer
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kids
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. On one hand,
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who favour
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games
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as an effective tool for the
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to spend
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. According to them,
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will enjoy their
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inside the room rather than going outside for physical activities and
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getting injured. It is generally seen that if both
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they favour
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playing
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as
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will manage themself inside the room. Some
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argue that
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games
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help
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to get familiar with
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.
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,
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are not realising that their
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are becoming couch potatoes by spending most of their
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in front of the computer.
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, studies have proven that 80% of
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who have health issues
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as obesity and vitamin deficiency are addicted to
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and they prefer to sit inside the room rather going outside and mingle with friends.
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, there
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many blood-shedding
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games
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are available in the market
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as PUBG which trigger
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criminal behaviour in
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. Many incidents
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reported that
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have conducted
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based on the encouragement from
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games
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. To summarise, it is a wrong trend that
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encourage
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to play
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games
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rather than sending them to fields and playgrounds.
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trend will adversely affect the health of
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future generations. I suggest a balanced way of
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along with physical activities and
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need to put effort to make sure
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • allure
  • captivate
  • supervise
  • accessible
  • scarcity
  • safer alternative
  • peer pressure
  • educational tools
  • cognitive skills
  • implications
  • obesity
  • poor posture
  • hand-eye coordination
  • problem-solving abilities
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