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It is important for people to take risks, in both their professional lives and personal lives. Do the advantages of taking these risks outweigh the disadvantages?

#people #risks #lives
Humans prefer to take
risks
 in all parts of their
life
 ,
for example
 , they like to take
risks
 in their
work
 to improve their
situations
. it has
this
 have some positive and negative points. On the one hand, some
people
 try to take
risks
 in their
life
 to grow their
situations
 or have a better
life
.they think that they should take
risks
 to change their
life
 or have a better situation in their professional
work
.they say without taking
risks
 they can grow up in their
life
 and with taking the risk they reach to good position rapidly.
For example
,if someone leaves their job and goes to be a self-employed who has a good plan and idea he can earn more money and make a better
life
.
On the other hand
, taking
risks
 has two sides and
people
 should attention to it. sometimes, taking
risks
 has negative results. If
people
 don't have a good plan or don't search for different sides of taking
risks
, they may be reached bad results in their
work
 or
life
.
for example
, somebody who sells their house to make their own
work
, if take a bad happens that it has bad
effects
 in
people
's economic so they can not buy anything from its shop . It can be the cause of failing its self employee. ,
Also
 its money is failing. So
risks
 have positive and negative points and their negative
effects
 are weight as same as positive
effects
.Humans should search for information on the other side of risk in different
situations
 before doing it. In conclusion, we find that
people
 like to take
risks
 in different fields of their
life
 and it can have positive or negative
effects
.
people
 should decide about suitable
situations
 for taking
risks
 or not
also
 the weight of positive
effects
 is the same as negative
effects
.
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