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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019) Percentage of households with electrical appliances

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019) Percentage of households with electrical appliances
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The given graphs illustrate the shifts in possession of electrical appliances and the difference in the total time spent
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doing household chores between the years 1920 and 2019. In an overview, the percentage of households that used Refrigerators increased considerably by 2019
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 the number of
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 given to household chores per
week
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 depleted by 2019. In the year 1920, zero
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percent
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 of households used refrigerators making it the least used appliance in 1920.
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 use increased considerably over the years and reached over 100
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households
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 by 1980 and remained constant throughout.
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vaccum
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vacuum
 cleaners
also
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 depicted similar trends displaying an increase from 30
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 in 1920 to 100
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percent
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 by 2019.Meanwhile, the use of washing machines fluctuated between 1940 and 1960 and depicted an increase from 40
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percent
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 in 1920 to about 70
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 in 2019. The number of
hours
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 spent doing household chores per
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 declined uniformly from 1920 to 2019.About 50
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 a
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 were spent in
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 work in the year 1920 which
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 to about 10
hours
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 per
week
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 in 2019.
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