Some people say that all secondary and higher secondary school students should be taught how to manage money as it is an important life skill. Do you agree or disagree?

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people believe that
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should be introduced at
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level . I concur with
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to be organized
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their financial budget . To commence with, one point of agreement
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for
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for
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level is making the
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self supporting
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children
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children
would learn how to manage
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the money
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they can buy their own
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help .
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them to be more independent and teach them how to be
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spender .
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teach them how to
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money
by
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money
,They can spend their funds an
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emergency
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acquiring
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acquiring
financial education development of the
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cognitive
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as it will help young people to stay in control of their budget and motive . them to set financial goals
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their
life
. It will teach them
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of
money
and spend their
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.
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in new gadgets or going
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outing spend their
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in unnecessary because of
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in
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financial
management
knowledge at
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management
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important
skill
to deal with in
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decision
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for future goals . It is
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factor for them to succeed in
life
when they group up . So. it should be part of their educational sector.
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