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Some say that news has no connection with most people’s lives and it is a waste of time for most of us to read newspapers and watch television news programs. Do you agree or disagree

#say #news #connection #people’s #lives #waste #time #newspapers #television #programs
Some people believe that electronic and print media have nothing to do with the
day to
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day
 lives of the messes
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 fact, only
engaging
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time consuming
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activity
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.
Although
 there are
plethora
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 of merits yet some demerits are
also
 there which will be elaborated
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 the upcoming subsequent paragraphs. On the one side, the world has become
global
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 village and anything happening
one
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 part of the site wouldn’t leave
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other part
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another part
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 unaffected,
for example
, Russian-
Ukraine
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 war caused
the
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 fuel shortage and
consequently
, prices raised all over the world and take the necessary measures
For instance
, in 2019, when there were Covid-19 cases
initially
 found in China, other countries could get prepared to combat the virus in advance.
As a result
, in some countries, the number of death cases could be reduced.
Hence
, these platforms of information are a vital source to get the
day to
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day
 knowledge
and
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happening all over.
Also
 by using “Editor’s note” people can raise their voices and highlight the issues occurring in their surroundings. Spending a fraction of your leisure time
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watching headlines or breaking news can give
the
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 plenty of statistics.
Additionally
, there can be some scientific, educational articles or
some
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influential stories to read which can help to improve
the
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wisdom and reasoning... Contrarily, media can shape people’s
opinion
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 adversely.
Moreover
, can portray any politician or Actor or any person according to
the
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 personal preferences
in addition
 to
this
, spread false news as well. In conclusion,
news
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 does have positive and negative impacts on
the
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people’s lives but we should not overlook the brighter side.
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