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Some believe that nuclear weapons benefit the world at large. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The diagram illustrates the number of Australian
men
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 and
women
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, who performed regular physical activity in 2010. In general, while
women
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, ageing in between 25 and above, have been more physically active throughout the period in question than
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, the latter, who are between the
age
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group
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 of 15 and 24, are more active than their counterparts.
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, the
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group
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 65 and above, experienced nearly a similar proportion of both
men
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 and
women
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 indulging in physical exercise with 46.70% and 47.10% respectively. Regarding the
women
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, of all
women
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, the
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group
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 45 to 54 witnessed the most participation at 53.30%, while the
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group
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 35-44 saw minimal participation from the
women
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 at 39.50%.
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, the senior
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, who fall under 35 and above, in the sample have been more active in the year 2010 than their younger counterparts. As for
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, physical activity is most popular among
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ageing
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 between 15 to 24,
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men
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, ageing in between 35 and 44, are most inactive in the lot at 39.50%.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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