Some people believe that education is the key to tackling hunger worldwide while others feel that the answer is in food aid. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

The debate over what is the key to tackling hunger around the world become one of the main topics to discuss. One’s
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that through education it can be solved while, others consider
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problem.
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foodstuff is the best option to fix worldwide starvation.
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this
essay will discuss both views.
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the idea that hunger worldwide may be tacked due to, education. It’s hard to believe that in
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urban areas where inhabitants do not eat enough which leads to
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of energy can be good learners.
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even in
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developed countries like
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their government found out that
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of hunger directly relates to
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of students to learn so they decided to monitor student’s
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sure that they do not participate in classes in a state of famine.
As a result
, most likely people may not be focused on their
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moreover
, they will think about
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instead
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they are studying. In fact
food
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to fix
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of
food
. As a role of strong argument
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this
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human nature. Owing to “Maslow’s hierarchy of needs” every person can discover that
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is the general needs which
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includes eating in sufficient quantities.
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not capable of taking any action unless he is hungry. In
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only actions can lead to changes, but with no
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there
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no
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actions. In
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I want to say that no matter what problem we are tackling it is about the tools that we are utilising and it
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to know what leads to happening things we want.
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we can not expect the individual to read until he
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alphabet
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indeed, it is the same case with education we can not mark
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worthwhile tool whereas, people can not satisfy their basic needs.
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