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Social media is becoming increasingly popular almost all age groups however sharing personal information on social media website does have risk do you think that the advantages of social media overweight disadvantages

#media #age #groups #information #website #risk
Nowadays, there has a widespread of social
media
user
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users
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 across the
global
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. Some
people
 think that it's sharing with
the
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others shows a heart-warming action, while others feel that there might be
having
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a risk when personal
information
being
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pubilicity
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publicity
publicly
. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both sides of the
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argument
arguement
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argument
 in the latter view.
Firstly
, one of the disadvantages is social
media
 contains
high
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 risk of personal
information
 leakage. We
often
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 required to fill in our basic data during our registration.
For example
, most scammer tracks your social
media
 and make
a
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fraud in order to get your savings.
Besides
 that,
as
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a hacker may get your privacy and have a trade.
Although
 social
media
 may upgrade, as well as the profession too.
On the other hand
,
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the relationship
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relationship
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relationships
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 between
people
 become closer to each other as the
benefits
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benefit
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 of social
media
. It is difficult to always
getting
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 in touch with
people
 without the internet. For
instant
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an instant
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,
using
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use
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 a video call to connect with your friend who staying
the
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overseas instantly. Look at the past,
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writing
writting
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writing
 a letter to a beloved in order to stay
connect
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.
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A
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As
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 letter takes weeks or
month
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months
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 to reach the opponent, similar
as
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 a reply. So, the
information
 that sharing with each other may not be current but the past. In conclusion, despite personal
information
 leakage,
falling
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and falling
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 into a scam, it's true that social
media
 connect
people
. In my opinion, I agree that social
media
 do
brings
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 advantages
outweigh
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 the drawbacks.
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