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CHILDREN SHOULD ALWAYS FOLLOW THEIR PARENTS’ ADVICE TO WHAT EXTEND DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE WITH THIS STATEMENT?

#children #parents’ #advice
Some people say that adhering
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parents
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 consultation is always a must for
children
. I agree with
this
 statement even though it is not practical all the time.
Firstly
, the primary reason is
parents
 are the best
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well-wishers
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well wishers
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 for their
children
. Only
parents
 know what is best and suitable for their kids.
Therefore
, they are very suitable and capable of giving worthy and priceless
advice
.
In addition
,
parents
 have had vast experience in life.
This
 will make a good impact on the
decision making
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 process.
For example
, it is common to see that
children
 who followed their
parents
 '
advice
 were more successful in their life.
On the other hand
, some
father
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 and
mother
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 are not updated with the current phase of development and technology. Sometimes, they lack behind in the thinking process as well. These reasons push them backwards in the thinking process.
Therefore
, their
advice
also
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 not reliable
to
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current
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 problems faced by their own son and daughter.
For example
,
parents
 with
poor
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 understanding
about
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 Information Technology cannot decide on their
children
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children's
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 preference
over
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 these subjects for their study. We need relevant
counsellor's
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counsellors'
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advice
 not
parents
 '
advice
 regarding
this
 problem. In conclusion, I believe that
parents
 are the true mentors for their
children
. It is necessary to follow their
parents
'
advice
 if
it
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 reliable and suitable.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • parental guidance
  • crucial
  • life lessons
  • best interests
  • life experience
  • understanding
  • challenges
  • invaluable
  • independence
  • critical thinking
  • relying solely
  • hinder
  • beliefs
  • desires
  • generational changes
  • rapid pace
  • social and technological changes
  • outdated
  • applicable
  • digital age
  • necessitating
  • balance
  • tradition
  • modernity
  • deeply ingrained
  • value
  • evolve
  • honoring
  • deviating
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