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Many people believe that e-books will never replace the role of printed media like books, newspapers and magazines. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #e-books #role #media #books #newspapers #magazines
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As the usage of
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the smartphone
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smartphone
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smartphones
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 has significantly skyrocketed during the past decade,
online
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the online
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medium
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media
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 has gained
its
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clout and is now dominating the news industry.
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Newspapers
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Newspaper
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The newspaper
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 used to be the most
favorable
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 method to seize
information
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 and it was common to see businessmen reading
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the newspaper
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newspaper
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newspapers
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 on a crowded train before the
smartphone
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has
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reigned.
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this
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 digitalized era, is it necessary for us to read
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the newspaper
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newspaper
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newspapers
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? I believe that there the role of
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newspaper
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the newspaper
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 today has been less important and should be substituted with
digital
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the digital
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 medium. The following paragraphs contain my opinion about why I believe
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newspaper
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the newspaper
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 is not useful as it was decades ago.
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, I believe that the lack of convenience explains the unimportance of
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newspaper
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. To copy a single fold of
newspaper
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,
newspaper
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 companies need to buy
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paper to print down the content, deliver the paper to each shop or customer, and
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 recollect it in terms of recycling. Not only that
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 process is not eco-friendly, but
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 there are
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 of hard work to do for letting the customer purchase the
newspaper
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.
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, news on
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a smartphone
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smartphone
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smartphones
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 can easily be sent to customers by just clicking the send button and can easily be modified afterwards in case there was
a false
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information
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.
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, since it takes a day until each customer reads the news, some
information
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 might be useless. Japan’s most popular
sports
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 today is baseball, and every night at 10pm there is a tv program called “Sports Navi” that highlights all the pro baseball matches. Every score of the game held in Japan and interviews are revealed during
this
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 program and similar content can be found on a related sports media page. It would be
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 neck if the same content is going to appear in the morning
newspaper
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, which many businessmen would want to read while eating breakfast.
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 these two reasons, I believe that
newspaper
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 today does not have an important role in
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society.
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, since more than
one thirds
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 of the population in Japan is above 60 years old, I am assuming that there are still many elderly people who have not adapted yet to achieve
information
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 via
smartphone
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. I believe that the
newspaper
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 industry will not be dominant as it was several decades ago but still co-exists with the digital medium due to its few demands.
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