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Computers are being used more and more in education. Some people say that this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences. Discuss both sides of this argument and then give your own opinion

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Computers
 became often utilised in education processes
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 of people think it is
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 trend, while others reckon it has
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negative consequences. In my point of
view
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this
 tendency has more drawbacks than positive sides.
However
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this
 essay will discuss both views. On the hand, we have
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 that says using
computers
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 pros and cons. To start with
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 obviously,
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 I want to mention is the suitability
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 the modern world which, require knowing how to use
devices
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 computer at the basic
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in
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 that case, students
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this
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school.
On the other hand
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 which
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 out
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 influence of
this
 trend has more foundation and reasons
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it
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.
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 of
researches
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 clearly illustrates how using gadgets
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 as
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computer
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the computer
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 has a bad impact on
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the social
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 skills of the learner.
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 teenagers use their
devices
 at home after coming from school,
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 if students will
also
, use
computers
 at school,
then
 we can expect increasing the time of using
devices
 which is not good at all. In
conclusion
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 I want to mention surveys that
shows
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 how using
devices
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 connected to IQ
therefore
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 is the achieve higher academic results through
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tools, in my
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computers
not
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 the best option.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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