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The table summarises the survey’s data about the importance of
communication
 skills needed for various occupations in 1997 and 2006. Overall, both for internal and external
communication
 the percentage of
people
 who find a particular skill essential increased. As for
communication
 outside of the company, dealing with
people
 is considered to be the most valuable employee characteristic. From 1997 to 2006 the importance of
this
 skill
had
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increased from 60 to 65
percent
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. The
second
 place is shared
by
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knowledge of particular
product
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products
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 or services and advising or caring about the clients.
Number
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 of
people
 marking these skills as essential grew by 6 and 3
percent
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 points to 41% and 39% respectively. For internal
communication
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 the most popular category is listening carefully to colleagues, which went up by 9
percent
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 points and reached
the
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 peak at 47% in 2006.
Significant
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 share of respondents voted for instructing or training
people
 (30% in 2006) and analysing problems together with others (26% in 2006). The least important skill in both external and internal
communication
 is making speeches or
presentation
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presentations
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 - the maximum value of 11
percent
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 was reached in 2006.
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