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All the university students should do voluntary work in their own time to help local community. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#university #students #work #time #community
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 is a great activity . it is argued that voluntary
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 is essential for each
university
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 student in their own
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 so as to help the local community, and I agree with
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 idea. There are some advantages if
university
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students
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 do voluntary
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firstly
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, voluntary
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 may put
students
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 in situations where they should communicate with local
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 who are from all walks of life
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, it can be useful for their lives since every person has experiences in their lives which are very precious and these
people
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 may share their experiences with
students
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,so
students
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 can gain valuable experiences.
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, if
students
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 do these kinds of jobs in order to help local
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 they may be encouraged to care about
people
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.
students
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 may relieve so many burdens of local
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 when they do these types of jobs .
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 a result, they may feel that they can be useful persons for their society, so they may be motivated to help others in every situation.
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 voluntary
work
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 has important positive points.
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, some
people
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 believe that voluntary
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 for
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students
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 can have a negative effect because these types of jobs can be very
time
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-consuming, and
students
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 cannot
work
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 on their
university
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 projects properly.
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, it does not seem reasonable enough because
students
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 often have spare
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, and they may have a lot of
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 every weekend, so they can manage their
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 for their duties perfectly. in conclusion, voluntary
work
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 can have positive impacts on
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students
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.
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, I completely agree with the idea that all
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students
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 should do voluntary
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 on their own
time
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