It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What sort of punishments should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children?

It is a strong desire in many
parents
and teachers to raise well-behaved
children
to become useful members of society and succeed in life.
Parents
,
therefore
, need to give their
children
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upbringing from an early age to enable them to tell right from wrong. To
this
end, it is almost impossible to exclude reward and
punishment
in regulating and controlling
children
’s behaviour, but what kind of
punishment
should be employed? In the history of human society, rewards and punishments, of any sort, have been in place to encourage good manners and discourage unhealthy ones. People should see that they will suffer the consequences if they misbehave, and how their wrongdoing may hurt others as well. Indeed,
this
teaching needs
to begin
from an early age both at home and at school as part of the curriculum.
Children
, especially at an early age, undergo several stages of development based on the kinds of patterns of
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and teachings they receive and are exposed to
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and form their identity and personality emulating their
parents
, teachers, and peers.
Then
, as
adults
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they tend to continue on in the habits and attitudes they formed and adopted as they interacted with others. To teach good
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,
parents
and teachers need,
first
of all, to demonstrate exemplary
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and act as good role models. To put it in perspective, it would be more difficult for a smoking father to prevent his child from trying cigarettes, while he continues to smoke.
However
, on some
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punishment
would be the best course of action. Proper disciplinary strategies are those that deprive
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children
of the things they most like to do or have.
For instance
, if a child refuses to brush his teeth, he can be denied his pocket money, or if a schoolboy bullies his peers, he can be required to go to school on holidays to do some service, missing the joy of the holiday. Corporal
punishment
,
however
, must be avoided at all times, in my opinion, as it may not only cause emotional problems, it would
also
set a bad example for the youth possibly teaching them to emulate aggressive
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. Undoubtedly,
children
should be taught good manners early in life, from the time they are taught right from left. Half the way will already be travelled if they are surrounded
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, and brought up in a healthy environment, both at school and at home. A carrot and stick approach, if
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appropriately, can induce good behaviour and help
children
think about their actions and encourage them to improve their manners throughout adulthood.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • disciplinary methods
  • emotional well-being
  • positive reinforcement
  • moral reasoning
  • behavioral issues
  • non-punitive
  • time-outs
  • loss of privileges
  • natural consequences
  • empathy
  • communication
  • physical punishment
  • aggression
  • correctional strategies
  • consistency
  • constructive discipline
  • open discussions
  • moral development
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