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Illiteracy continues to be a concern for many countries in the world today. What are the causes of illiteracy in modern world, and what effects does it have on the people concerned and on society as a whole?

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Nowadays,
illiteracy
 is
considerable
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 issue in the world, that can impact
on
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children
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future
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. There seem to be two main causes, and a number of effects, which we will discuss here. Possibly the main cause of
illiteracy
 increased in countries, especially in villages, is
lack
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the lack
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 of primary education facilities like proper schools and teachers.
for example
, in slum dog areas there
are
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not
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school
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schools
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,
and
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 relevant educational institutions for
children
 to educate.
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the well-known
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well-known
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 cause can be
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the growth
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growth
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the growth
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 of unemployed in societies which leads to
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a reduction
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reduction
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of
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 income. It means that low income may have financial pressures on poor families’
children
 to give up education.
Such
 as
children
labor
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 in Tehran should work
instead
 of going to schools, and
pay
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charge
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 of families, so their future will be destroyed. The effects of
this
 problem on people can be quite serious.
Firstly
,
reduction
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 of
people
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people's
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 social health can hurt particularly teenagers. Indeed, uneducated parents do not know how to provoke illness and
children
 can be sacrificed of
illiteracy
 and sick folk will not have
chance
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 to develop.
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,
countries
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in countries
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 like Zimbabwe
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 people
more
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suffer from HIV because they do not have knowledge about ways of
spread
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the spread
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 of
this
 virus.
Moreover
, widely-observed
illiteracy
impact
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impacts
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on
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communication in societies. In fact, unlettered societies cannot have
relevant
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a relevant
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relationship
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relationships
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 with modern and developed ones
therefore
, they remain isolated and undeveloped like Sumali. In conclusion, perhaps
absence
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the absence
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 of education facilities, idleness and low income are major causes, and they affect both social health and social communications.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Literacy
  • Illiteracy
  • Poverty
  • Access
  • Educational resources
  • Social inequality
  • Discrimination
  • Gender disparity
  • Racial bias
  • Cultural norms
  • Technological advances
  • Political instability
  • Disruption
  • Education systems
  • Socioeconomic status
  • Job prospects
  • Health implications
  • Self-esteem
  • Empowerment
  • Economic growth
  • Social cohesion
  • Civic participation
  • Democratic processes
  • Exclusion
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