Some people believe that they should be able to keep all the money they earn and should not pay any tax to the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people are unwilling to pay taxes as they consider
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as a burden, which would reduce their disposable income. I believe that levying taxes is essential
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revenue, a
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is not able to function well. The
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could invest
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revenue in public services and facilities in order to serve the public and develop
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, a great public transport system enables commuters to travel to and from work more efficiently, avoiding traffic jams and accidents, which are unnecessary to happen.
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, the authority is able to spend money on building more schools, which encourages more students from deprived backgrounds to attend school, improving literacy.
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attributed to the responsibility of the
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. The authority subsidizes the poor who do not get the medical treatment they need because of their inability to pay medical bills, and who do not have enough money to rent a flat, which would be solved by the
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as providing them with low-cost housing.
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, all of them regardless of public services and facilities could not be funded by the private sector, because the aim of it is to make high profits not to do charity.
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revenue is indispensable for the
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to keep
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society running.
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, they are reluctant to earn more money, especially high-income groups, and some merchants are
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. The result of it is that
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, whose growth may be stagnant eventually.
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needs to collect proper
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in order not to curb
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economic growth. In conclusion, it is necessary for the
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to charge
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to make a
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function well,
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levying high taxes appears to inhibit social progress.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • contribute
  • welfare
  • public services
  • progressive taxation
  • distribution of wealth
  • civic duty
  • social cohesion
  • tax evasion
  • economic disparities
  • social unrest
  • individual rights
  • societal responsibilities
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