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Space research costs billions of dollars. Some people think that the money should be invested on more practical projects here on th earth. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

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Space
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 research costs a fortune , I strongly agree with
people
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 who think that the
money
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 should be
investes
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invested
on
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 more practical projects here on
earth
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. As
human
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, we were created to help each other, it
defeat
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 the whole purpose that most
people
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 believe in
by
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of
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 wasting
money
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 on
space
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 research.We have some much things that we still need to discover here on
earth
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 before we even think of investing in
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space
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 where no one human is right now, We have
the
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nature and
environment
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an environment
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 that we are struggling to take care of here on
earth
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 due to ignorance and still we use so much
money
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 researching planets that are of less benefit to us right now
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There is
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do
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 much
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destruction
distruction
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destruction
 to land and vegetation on
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earth
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the earth
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that is
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 affecting the ecosystem and we should put our focus on that than the galaxy that we have less control over. Elon Musk, John Bizos and NASA spend too much time looking for new technology that we will still discover in the future, other than finding solutions to problems that we already have here on
earth
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. To some extent ,
space
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 projects
has
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 allowed us to improve on technology,
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 , the invasion of an MRI machine
that is
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 used in hospitals,
also
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 the use of satellite in communication that has allowed
people
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 to interact all over the world. A scientist called Will and his team
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 managed to take so many pictures of the
earth
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 and how gradually changing it is becoming from
a
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beautiful vegetation and lakes to open spaces and
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destruction
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distruction
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destruction
 of nature and affecting ecosystem through satellite cameras, and
this
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 has been a great help as
people
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 are now learning how they are making an impact to the ecosystem and polluting the climate. In conclusion,
space
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discovering
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 is a waste of
money
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, that can be used to improve what we have here on
earth
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 and it can help
people
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 in poverty.
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