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All parents want the best opportunities for their children. There are some people who think that school teaches children a skill but others think having a range of subjects is better for the children's future. Discuss both sides.

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Every parent wants the best chances for their own children. Some people think that their children need to
study
 all
subjects
 but there are people who think that it is more important to
study
 limited things. I think that it depends on the situation. I will discuss both points and describe my opinion.
First
 of all, we can say that not only math, science, and English but
also
 music, and art
subjects
 are important.
For example
, I read a book
that is
 about a country where a lot of singers were born. Music is very popular in
this
 country which is located in Europa. A few famous artists but
this
 country focused on education. The governments decided to introduce more time to
music
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. After
this
 action, some students started their careers as singers and one part of them became so famous in the world. Famous people surged a lot because of the change.
In contrast
, if I want to be a pilot, I need to
study
 how to drive an aeroplane and so on.
For me
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, It does not have the means to
study
 other
subjects
 that I do not should to learn.
Therefore
, if I know what I want to become, it is more important to have a range of
subjects
. 　Overall, I think that limiting the subject is a good idea depending on the students.
On the other hand
, if we changed the systems of education, it made a bad situation. A huge student does not know what is their goal. In
this
 situation, if we limited the subject, it could be limiting their opportunities. The conclusion is that I think that having a range of
subjects
 is better for the children's future.
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