Nowadays , in the society consumer goods are cheaper to buy. Do the adavantages outhweigh disadvantages ?

These days the products used by
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individuals are
much
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affordable
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to purchase. I certainly opine that even though it
have
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few
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drawbacks, positives have
a
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upper hand which I will depict
the
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following passages.
To begin
with,
hence
the consumer goods rates are reduced to a greater
extend
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it is paving
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the ways
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ways
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towards eradicating starvation. Because it is found that
majority
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of the world's population is coming
under
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the below poverty line since
,
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the price of
consumers
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consumer
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goods
such
as rice and grains are lowered majority of the population can have
privilege
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the privilege
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to consume these food grains which eventually
lower
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the famine in the nations.
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, in Tamil Nadu government introduced a scheme to provide rice at 2 rupees which
was
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successful and it was found that poverty around the state was reduced to a greater
extend
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. Once the price of daily use commodities
are
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made cheap purchase power of people will increase and eventually brings fortune to the nations by increased life expectancy.
In addition
, it can even help to decrease
child
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mortality rate. Once the daily use
protein
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supplements and cereals are made
affordable
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majority of the mothers would be able to consume
when
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in
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their maternity period which
provide
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adequate
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level of supplements for the child in the womb.
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, In Africa, during
the
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pregnancy
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the apex authorities provided adequate protein for the mother
cost effectively
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which reflected in the
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newborn
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new born
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with health and immunity. It is important to bring down the infant mortality rate
through
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providing the supplements at
lower
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cost
helps
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this
scenario
On the other hand
, when the fare of daily use products
are
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made cheap profit margin for the authorities along with the producers will be lowered which may result in the withdrawal of farming done by the individuals.
For instance
, recently when the return of tomatoes decreased considerably most of the farmers who were producing
this
product turned their land for cultivating other
high yielding
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crops. To conclude, it is important for
the
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nations to bring the daily usage of food grains cheaper because it certainly
improvise
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the
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life expectancy and lot many advantages. Even though, it
have
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few
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demerits positives take the leap.
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