Nowadays , in the society consumer goods are cheaper to buy. Do the adavantages outhweigh disadvantages ?
These days the products used by
the
individuals are Correct article usage
apply
much
Change the adjective
muchly
affordable
to purchase. I certainly opine that even though it Correct quantifier usage
more affordable
have
Change the verb form
has
few
drawbacks, positives have Correct article usage
a few
a
upper hand which I will depict Correct article usage
the
the
following passages.
Change preposition
in the
To begin
with, hence
the consumer goods rates are reduced to a greater extend
it is paving Replace the word
extent
Correct article usage
the ways
ways
towards eradicating starvation. Because it is found that Fix the agreement mistake
way
majority
of the world's population is coming Correct article usage
the majority
under
the below poverty line sinceChange preposition
apply
,
the price of Remove the comma
apply
consumers
goods Change the noun form
consumer
such
as rice and grains are lowered majority of the population can have privilege
to consume these food grains which eventually Change the article
the privilege
lower
the famine in the nations. Correct subject-verb agreement
lowers
For example
, in Tamil Nadu government introduced a scheme to provide rice at 2 rupees which was
successful and it was found that poverty around the state was reduced to a greater Change the verb form
were
extend
. Once the price of daily use commodities Replace the word
extent
are
made cheap purchase power of people will increase and eventually brings fortune to the nations by increased life expectancy.
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
In addition
, it can even help to decrease child
mortality rate. Once the daily use Add an article
the child
protein
supplements and cereals are made Change preposition
of protein
affordable
majority of the mothers would be able to consume Add an article
the affordable
an affordable
when
Correct pronoun usage
them when
in
their maternity period which Change preposition
during
provide
Change the verb form
provides
adequate
level of supplements for the child in the womb. Add an article
an adequate
For instance
, In Africa, during the
Correct article usage
apply
pregnancy
the apex authorities provided adequate protein for the mother Add a comma
,pregnancy
cost effectively
which reflected in the Add a hyphen
cost-effectively
Correct your spelling
newborn
new born
with health and immunity. It is important to bring down the infant mortality rate Correct your spelling
newborn
through
providing the supplements at Change preposition
by
lower
cost Correct article usage
a lower
helps
Correct subject-verb agreement
help
this
scenario
On the other hand
, when the fare of daily use products are
made cheap profit margin for the authorities along with the producers will be lowered which may result in the withdrawal of farming done by the individuals. Change the verb form
is
For instance
, recently when the return of tomatoes decreased considerably most of the farmers who were producing this
product turned their land for cultivating other high yielding
crops.
To conclude, it is important for Add a hyphen
high-yielding
the
nations to bring the daily usage of food grains cheaper because it certainly Correct article usage
apply
improvise
Change the verb form
improvises
the
life expectancy and lot many advantages. Even though, it Correct article usage
apply
have
Change the verb form
has
few
demerits positives take the leap.Correct article usage
a few
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