Peoples shopping habits depend more on the age group they belong to than any other factor to what extent you agree or disagree?

Shopping plays an important role in our consumer culture, and some
people
consider that
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of
people
is determined primarily by their
age
. In that case, while I embrace the notion, I believe that
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age
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, there are other significant factors in shaping shopping habits. It goes without saying that
age
is a major factor in consumer behaviour. As demands of youth differ from middle-aged
people
and the old. Showing one’s own
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is a key reason for
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of youth, but the determinant of middle-aged
people
is the
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and comfortableness of the products.
For instance
, young
people
prefer to buy a new feather coat which leads
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latest fashion trend with
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while the old
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more
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about the price and warmth degree rather than style.
Thus
,
age
does influence shopping habits.
However
, there are several other factors, which make a big difference
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choices of customers.
Firstly
, gender is another determinant of consumption, showing typically in the selection of products.
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cosmetics are obviously more than
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of men,
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the interests
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high-tech goods of men are more than women.
Secondly
, lifestyle
also
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habit
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of shopping.
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healthy equipment
such
as
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bicycles, yoga rugs and running machines, while commuters spend
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fast
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and public transport tickets maybe more than other
people
. All
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explain that
the
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consumption
preferences
depend on diversity factors. In conclusion, the
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of customers are determined by
age
, gender,
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lifestyle
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and so on. It is not wise to say that the
preferences
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depend on a single case.
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