some people believe that if people are not allowed to work after the age of 60, it cause problems. Do you agree or disagree?
Rules for working at the
age
above sixty
varies country to country. Many believe it is healthy to get retire from work
after reaching sixty
while others believe retiring from work
only because of the age
limits creates difficulties. Personally, I am in favour of the latter and in the following ,paragraphs I will be explaining my views.
To begin
with, restricting people
from work
after a certain age
produces huge stress about their financial stability as the job was the main source of livelihood for a long period of time. For instance
, service holders in Bangladesh compulsorily retire after sixty
when in most cases families struggle to carry on due to a sudden cut off of income. Thus
, the person who was once responsible for providing for all needs of the household goes through unbearable mental stress just because he is now not able to support himself financially as before. Such
incapability kills their inner peace which may lead to damage to family bonds.
Another point worth mentioning is that working keeps people
active and healthy. When a person stops working as s/he gets to sixty
, cells of their body stop and lose regeneration power and thus
the process of ageing goes faster. On the other hand
, people
who continue to work
tens to age
two times slower than those who retire after sixty
. For instance
, the Japanese are renowned in the world for their longevity which is mostly contributed by
the practice of being active even at the Change preposition
to
age
of 100.
In conclusion, the age
limit for work
permits causes people
to go through a financial crises
leading to damage to family cohesion along with gearing up their ageing process. Correct the article-noun agreement
a financial crisis
financial crises
Therefore
, governments of any country should not force citizens to leave their work
just because of age
if they are fit and willing to continue their jobs.Submitted by barson.mithun392 on
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